Everything Under the Moon

Okay, this is a poem of mine I submitted to poetry.com and has been accepted and is going to be featured in the book "Immortal Verse" ^_^
So read and enjoy....feedback is always good...just to know what people think...Thanks ^_^


Path of Blades

Walk two moons while on
A path of razor blades
So easy to slip either way.

And while your dancing
On these heights
Dont make a deal with the devil

If you play with fire
You'll get burned eventually.
But if you dont play
You'll never feel its warmth.

Normal humans live
Half-empty lives

But poets live on words
Musicians on their music
Artists with their art

We all need to fill the void within

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i found it to be very boring. i loved the first stanza however.

Hmm, I think the layout is interesting. Each stanza by itself works, but as Sobek says it's sort of boring that way... but if you take the last half of a stanza and the first half of the next it flows differently.

Not bad.

Hmm...first time someone's ever said it's boring.... ^_^

Cool.

I dunno why but most of my poetry flows together and rhymes without me putting too much thought into it. Its kinda like pen to paper, words on page, read them and "oh look, another poem" ^_^

Thanks for the feedback guys *Hugs* I'll post some more stuff soon.

I like it, but I'm an amateur poet, and so I guess thats why it sounded really great to me. But it was interesting and I can feel its truth.

there is no such thing as an ametuer poet to me, if you have emotion you can write a poem as good as any "professional" the only difference between them and you is some sucker who knows nothing about anything sees a bunch of pretty words and buys them

"Thanks for the feedback guys *Hugs* I'll post some more stuff soon."

when a poem is posted i always give my oppinion lol. and i look forward to reading more.

Hehe. Thanks Sobek. ^_^

I like your name by-the-by. Everyone here has such interesting names! And alot are based on mythology or gemstones or animals...its cool ^_^

^^^^ I like his real name...oh wait I dont know it

I read your other poems. This one isnt my favorite, but I like the way you write, because it is different each time. Kepp up the good work

Thanks sugar. Will post more soon. ^_^